Larry-Sun:

That's not a good way to talk, White. Please apologize.

It is okay...I would have been worried if she was nice sef

Mynd_44:
Okay......cos happy endings are happy and my works are dark and witchy.
Happily ever after na myth jorh

Myth is synonymous with Fiction.

Larry-Sun:

Mazi, you're beginning to scare me o. Thickening the plot is most important. Turning a character to a Pope or Porn star might diminish the originality of the plotting. Focusing on the plot development should rather be paramount.

Ahhh! No fear abegi! No be plot development again? No worry! I will develop the plot soo much that Lucan will have enough room for 300 wives and 700 concubines.

#...just kidding though, you should know me better by now...#

Oahray: those 'unnecesary details' are foundation stones upon which the plot can be built. All NL mosquitoes are the same regardless of their colour. They want something so straightforward. Its a detective/crime novel, not a romantic shortstory.

Mr ,u ought nt troll @ d Mistress .is her observation and also dnt 4get she had a point ,we r here ,all of us to enrich ourselves .i guess d beta we take dis lil tins in d beta we bcme

jiraiyas:
Mr ,u ought nt troll @ d Mistress .is her observation and also dnt 4get she had a point ,we r here ,all of us to enrich ourselves .i guess d beta we take dis lil tins in d beta we bcme

noted sire.

Mynd_44: Larry, seeing that I am last on the list, do I end the story or continue it and throw it back to you? be warned, I don't do happy endings ooo. I even hate it when the good guy wins in movies

That is so totally fuccked up.

jiraiyas:
Mr ,u ought nt troll @ d Mistress .is her observation and also dnt 4get she had a point ,we r here ,all of us to enrich ourselves .i guess d beta we take dis lil tins in d beta we bcme

I noticed it too, but I felt he was giving us points to work on. Every detail must not be a waste. It usually should be a pointer for which direction the story should follow. It is now left for the next set of writers to take some of the 'unnecessary' details, develop it and incorporate it into the plot.

@larry. I only apologize wen warranted. I dint insult him. Dont become all big brotherish because iv bin callin u uncle, k!. @ oaray. Obviously ur learner. Some details drag the storyline, and introduce too many leads/issues for the reader to consider. Its always advisable to let the reader form his own opinion/impression abt a xter.

Ishilove:
I noticed it too, but I felt he was giving us points to work on. Every detail must not be a waste. It usually should be a pointer for which direction the story should follow. It is now left for the next set of writers to take some of the 'unnecessary' details, develop it and incorporate it into the plot.

my thoughts exactly.

white mosquito: @ oaray. Obviously ur learner. Some details drag the storyline, and introduce too many leads/issues for the reader to consider. Its always advisable to let the reader form his own opinion/impression abt a xter.

lol. Larry has not even defined the character he wrote about. Tell me, WHAT OPINION DID HE FORM FOR YOU?

Not every detail in a novel is relevant to the main issues. I'm sure you know that. In fact, some details are meant to lead you towards a premature and ultimately wrong conclusion.
In this case, he had to write both for the readers and subsequent writers. I feel that is why he added so much details. That said, every writer writes differently, so do not expect others to write exactly the way you like it.

BTW, its true I'm a learner and do not have any published book like you do . However I do not see how that affects the fact that Larry did a good job with his intro.

white mosquito: @larry. I only apologize wen warranted. I dint insult him. Dont become all big brotherish because iv bin callin u uncle, k!. @ oaray. Obviously ur learner. Some details drag the storyline, and introduce too many leads/issues for the reader to consider. Its always advisable to let the reader form his own opinion/impression abt a xter.

I'm not being big brotherish, White. I thought you weren't very polite and demanded you apologize. But seeing that you didn't acknowledge your shortcomings, I better let you be.

I didn't draw a definte background for the character, if you have noticed. I didn't even give Lucan a surname, I want someone else to do that. The first chapter is mainly to introduce suspense from which the subsequent chapters would draw. Some explanations are still hanging, and I'm sure the other writers would rightly fill the void. Like take for instance, the strange phone number which was used to call Lucan. There should be a plausible explanation for that, it cannot just be ignored because that is one of those things the readers would expect being succintly explained. In the explanation too, there shouldn't be any fantastic excuse; no supernatural involvement should be drawn from it.

If the handwriting on the wall, however, isn't legible enough, I shall await till my turn to post surfaces again, so that this detail would be outline.

Being a detective story that it is, a corpse should naturally be introduced. This may be drawn eventually at the second chapter or the tenth.

Those 'unnecessary' details may serve as pointers with which to use in thickening the plot or alleviating tensions already built up in the suspense. Ishilove has said a whole lot of what I mean. I can't wait to read the updates. Peace all

Mazi_Omenuko:
#...just kidding though, you should know me better by now...#

Forgive me, Mazi. I know you'll develop a wonderful plotting

Only chapter 1 and the tension amongst the nland writers is so thick, you can actually slice through it with a knife.

Barely contained, frayed tempers on edge, seat gripping, electrifying stuff! Battle of the egos as no writer wants to be shown up as "sub-standard"!

Never a dull moment here. The cracks are beginning to show as the battle of wits picks up pace...lol! I'm already enjoying the show.

Ride on, fellow writers...ride on I sayest...

Efemena_xy: Only chapter 1 and the tension amongst the nland writers is so thick, you can actually slice through it with a knife.

Barely contained, frayed tempers on edge, seat gripping, electrifying stuff! Battle of the egos as no writer wants to be shown up as "sub-standard"!

Never a dull moment here. The cracks are beginning to show as the battle of wits picks up pace...lol! I'm already enjoying the show.

Ride on, fellow writers...ride on I sayest...

HUH?

Mynd_44:
HUH?

Nothing.

Just dabbling in a 'lil bit 'o soliloquy...

Efemena_xy:

Nothing.

Just dabbling in a 'lil bit 'o soliloquy...

But 'battle of the egos'? Now

Efemena_xy:

Nothing.

Just dabbling in a 'lil bit 'o soliloquy...

Okay oooo

Larry-Sun:

But 'battle of the egos'? Now

Methinks the gentleman doth protest...

*** Bikonu, read between the lines. I know you get my drift...***

Mynd_44:
Okay oooo

Na so naw

good morning people...Mynd,early as usual and am studying Efe's habit, yet to get her pattern.
the excitement is palpable...and a lot of other emotions too!
great start from Larry...lets see where Frank will take us.

I am it guys. I must confess, larry has got my brain crackin. I hear guys talking about developin plots like its easy for me to read into larrys mind.

I love challenges and this is one. I can't even wait to see what I can come up with. So like u all, let's watch and see

frank3.16:
I am it guys. I must confess, larry has got my brain crackin. I hear guys talking about developin plots like its easy for me to read into larrys mind.

I love challenges and this is one. I can't even wait to see what I can come up with. So like u all, let's watch and see

I have a feeling that you only read the first part of the story I posted (the Italics), I posted the story in two parts o.

Larry-Sun:

I have a feeling that you only read the first part of the story I posted (the Italics), I posted the story in two parts o.

Dnt mind frank @all ,he is jokin .mr larry u did briliantly u even draw ur pointers out ,jst too much info for 1st chapter though bt i mst say u blew me readin even though the revelation came quickly .thanx for dis auth

Larry-Sun:

Those 'unnecessary' details may serve as pointers with which to use in thickening the plot or alleviating tensions already built up in the suspense. Ishilove has said a whole lot of what I mean. I can't wait to read the updates. Peace all

I agree with Larry, but then every writer has a definite signature, as brilliant as they can be if you read their books often you'll get to flow along with them. I have read lots of books and i flow with my authors. I might not be able to predict them but i don't get no surprises either. Be that as it may i love larry's write-up. It is professionally done and he did set the bar high for other writers. But then the remaining writers are way up too. Only problem i see is taking the novel so high up, some readers get lost finding their way out of "unnecessary details"

sigmundfreud: good morning people...Mynd,early as usual and am studying Efe's habit, yet to get her pattern.
the excitement is palpable...and a lot of other emotions too!
great start from Larry...lets see where Frank will take us.

The more you look, the less you see...

Nonethless, I'll take that as a compliment kind sir...

Efemena_xy:

The more you look, the less you see...

...not for a detective of the Lucan Order!

All this talking is boring jorh, my own writing sef is boring.

Infact I am bored....

Larry-Sun:

I'm not being big brotherish, White. I thought you weren't very polite and demanded you apologize. But seeing that you didn't acknowledge your shortcomings, I better let you be.

I didn't draw a definte background for the character, if you have noticed. I didn't even give Lucan a surname, I want someone else to do that. The first chapter is mainly to introduce suspense from which the subsequent chapters would draw. Some explanations are still hanging, and I'm sure the other writers would rightly fill the void. Like take for instance, the strange phone number which was used to call Lucan. There should be a plausible explanation for that, it cannot just be ignored because that is one of those things the readers would expect being succintly explained. In the explanation too, there shouldn't be any fantastic excuse; no supernatural involvement should be drawn from it.

If the handwriting on the wall, however, isn't legible enough, I shall await till my turn to post surfaces again, so that this detail would be outline.

Being a detective story that it is, a corpse should naturally be introduced. This may be drawn eventually at the second chapter or the tenth.

Those 'unnecessary' details may serve as pointers with which to use in thickening the plot or alleviating tensions already built up in the suspense. Ishilove has said a whole lot of what I mean. I can't wait to read the updates. Peace all

oga you don de unravel the story already º°˚˚˚°º‎​ . Looks like you have the whole plot in your head and you want others to hopefully follow it like that until it gets to your turn.
Pls Red mosquito should not disappoint me o. I'm counting on his part for a laugh. Ishi can you pls check the date for your update again? If possible write it on a piece of paper and carry it 'everywhere you go'. We wouldn't want you to go on energy saving mode around that time o.

Hmmmmmm, OH my. HEY,just one topic and it brought ds much tension. How is my client goin 2 cope?. Well,i knw my client well,he will just do well.

brokoto: oga you don de unravel the story already º°˚˚˚°º‎​ . Looks like you have the whole plot in your head and you want others to hopefully follow it like that until it gets to your turn.

If that's what you think, sir, then you're wrong. The mystery hasn't even begun. I didn't unravel anything, I don't even know what direction the plot may swerve. I only made out those pointers for the next writer to easily draw his plots. It is humanly impossible for the story to follow the pattern you supposedly said I'm hoping. By the way, I don't have any other plot other than what I've already written in the first chapter.

Bless you, sir.

semid4lyfe: @ Larry, hope this won't you distract you from updating The Paradox of Abel?

Anyway, good first chapter. . .liked it

No, it won't Thanks a lot, Semid. Nice hearing from you, sir.

Larry-Sun:

If that's what you think, sir, then you're wrong. The mystery hasn't even begun. I didn't unravel anything, I don't even know what direction the plot may swerve. I only made out those pointers for the next writer to easily draw his plots. It is humanly impossible for the story to follow the pattern you supposedly said I'm hoping. By the way, I don't have any other plot other than what I've already written in the first chapter.

Bless you, sir.

ok sir. I stand corrected. I was actually referring to the comment you made when quoted whitemosquito and not your chapter 1. Anyway, I can't wait.