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JESAM

I called, yes! I called not once

Not twice, not today, not sure

My state, she measured in ounce

And behold I called her my anchor

She is black, she is Africa, and she is beautiful

She is dark, she is Amara, and she is adorable

I call her not today, definitely not tomorrow

I call her when I feel love and sorrow

She is a cumin, she is a dove

It is she I would call love.



KAJO’S LIB

KAJO


Life is a great mystery

That metamorphoses in three’s

The first an endearing part

With lots of admiration and pacts

The second, always on a move

Seconded by reasoning and prove

The third is a sweet-sour taste of life

Vindicated by only those that strived

THE TWIN RIVERS


I met a river in labour

Heavy from the stomach to the mouth

She asked me for a little a favour

If she could flow to the north or south.



I asked her if she flowed at ease

To decide if she flows west or to the east



But she said she wasn’t a nurse

But she knew she bore in her twin rivers.

I didn’t comprehend her words or thoughts

But felt pity because she had fever.



She said she shall name one river Niger

To the other, she would name river Benue.

All these she did to impress her hubby, Niger-area

Who friends and foes preferred to call Nigeria

Please comment oooo, what did i do wrong?

Looks like i did poorly on this poems. No comment at all

Nice one Kagari you did well the problem is that you have not yet opened up your mind.Keep writting,the day you start learning from your write up know dat you've opened up your mind.More so,read the works of Badmusce,Princessa,Jodekess,Firestar and Texanomaly.Theres alot for you to learn.I do learn from them but know this 'EVERY WRITTER IS UNIQUE IN HIS/HER OWN WAY.

Please anyone there to appraise a poem I'm about uploading?

Any one there?

Kk, roll it @pires24

Justiceenams: Nice one Kagari you did well the problem is that you have not yet opened up your mind.Keep writting,the day you start learning from your write up know dat you've opened up your mind.More so,read the works of Badmusce,Princessa,Jodekess,Firestar and Texanomaly.Theres alot for you to learn.I do learn from them but know this 'EVERY WRITTER IS UNIQUE IN HIS/HER OWN WAY.

thanks for the comments

but i dont think i need to look up to anybody at my writing stage

go through my poems on my profile. Only if you know me

To My Bee's Knee

Game not with my heart
By your stonewalling art
That we may ourselves have a glee
Of a lasting wet dream
Which shall endure
Like a bristlecone pine.

How your yea made me gay
Having reached our bloom
Should we not enjoy our may?
Bereave me not of this boon
Anon to the partterre let's ooze.

Neither did I had a clue
Nor was I given a cue
That you are as the honey suckle
Could made me missed my orgeat and sherbet
Oh! How your caress imbued on me a salve.

Shall I compare you to the altair?
Cruising into my life in beams and rays
Glossy like a sun bird causing a stare
Sleek to my feel cutesy and fey.

You are the bird of paradise
Finely curved like the cypress vine
You smell so sweet like a fragrant pine
Even sweeter fragrance than the moon flower.

The moon and sun may fail to shine it light!
The ocean may fail to afford us water!
But my love for you shall always glow.

By Piresg24

Please! anyone there to comment on my poem.

Nice one @pirez

but u need to create a writing niche

what are ur strongest topics when writing on
.work on them

you can drop another

@Kagari.....Thanks 4 ur comment. You can check more works on my profile!

kagari:

thanks for the comments

but i dont think i need to look up to anybody at my writing stage

go through my poems on my profile. Only if you know me

you're good but you can always gain more from others works