Yall tell me what you think of this,


Every night I cry myself to sleep,
I gave you my heart, my soul to keep

All you seem to do is treat me so wrong,
Day after day I see myself singing the same song

I constantly pack my things and leave you be,
Then my phone rings, and its you saying you need me

I tell myself that I'm so through with you,
But I find myself loyally running back to you

Thinking that you finally learned to cherish what you got,
And like a fool, I give you the only master key to my lock

We don't even make love to each other any more,
I lay there while you do your thing and I stare straight at the door

Oh God, tell me how things got to this way,
I wish i could just soar and leave my troubles at bay

I dream of angels, but live with demons,
There aint no one who understands what I'm feeling

You said you loved me, and that we were one,
So why do I feel like the punch line to your pun

I stare at the window and imagine how I used to be your brown sugar baby,
And how you used to drive my body crazy

I remember my first time, how it was a night so endearing,
You held and kissed me so tenderly as we kept on dancing

Afterwards, you held me to your delicate heart,
You claimed not even a hurricane could tear us apart

But now not even the Red Cross could save us from the commotion,
Because im nothing but a love slave to your potion

more to come. . .

All you seem to do is treat me so wrong,

Please explain how u were treated so wrong, i'm very curious

whitelexi:

Please explain how u were treated so wrong, i'm very curious

read in between the lines and figure out what the poem is trying to say.

onyinye2:

read in between the lines and figure out what the poem is trying to say.

The song is:

1) Too long, and
2) Says nothing about how u were treated wrong

I wouldnt ask if i knew, so i repeat my question. . . How exactly were u treated so wrong?

whitelexi:

The song is:

1) Too long, and
2) Says nothing about how u were treated wrong

I wouldnt ask if i knew, so i repeat my question. . . How exactly were u treated so wrong?

well let me try and explain this, the POEM is basically taking about how a lady who is in love with a man, but each day it lessens. the man no longer treats her like he loves her. he neglects her and takes advantage of her love. she wants to leave and find a man more worthy but he has a hold on her so strong that she is a love slave.

If this is a Song, you should feature Tuface and 9ice on the track.

did you even like/understand the POEM??

Erm!! I guess I did. I

Correct me if i am wrong.

It's about a woman, whinning about how her love life is so messed up, and how shes so gaullible and caught up in her fantasy world she cant even get her mind right and make a firm decision and stick to it.

@esss

that was a hit and miss. read my post to whitelexi to see what it really means.

Same thing, different sentence

onyinye2:

Yall tell me what you think of this,


Every night I cry myself to sleep,
I gave you my heart, my soul to keep

All you seem to do is treat me so wrong,
Day after day I see myself singing the same song

I constantly pack my things and leave you be,
Then my phone rings, and its you saying you need me

I tell myself that I'm so through with you,
But I find myself loyally running back to you

Thinking that you finally learned to cherish what you got,
And like a fool, I give you the only master key to my lock

We don't even make love to each other any more,
I lay there while you do your thing and I stare straight at the door

Oh God, tell me how things got to this way,
I wish i could just soar and leave my troubles at bay

I dream of angels, but live with demons,
There aint no one who understands what I'm feeling

You said you loved me, and that we were one,
So why do I feel like the punch line to your pun

I stare at the window and imagine how I used to be your brown sugar baby,
And how you used to drive my body crazy

I remember my first time, how it was a night so endearing,
You held and kissed me so tenderly as we kept on dancing

Afterwards, you held me to your delicate heart,
You claimed not even a hurricane could tear us apart

But now not even the Red Cross could save us from the commotion,
Because im nothing but a love slave to your potion

more to come. . .

FRESH LOVE WILL SET YOU FREE

Your tears pierced my heart and left it bleeding.
Yours was a sad love poem worth reading

True Angels do not weep
True love forever is for keep

A new song you will sing
A new soul will your heart cling
Fresh love will the phone bring
For your love makes my heart sing

The master key I misuse
Your true love I refuse
Delilah got me confuse
Oh! your true love I refuse

Come back to me my love
peace of heart I will offer like dove
Together the demons we can fight
And our love we will take to a new height

I still love you my sugar cane
without you I can't be the same
My angel is not for fun
Not a pawn nor a pun
But my rainbow in the sun!

That first night is still a gold
Losing you will make my heart cold
Let our love mature and be old
Your love to another I will never sold

We can overcome this storm and hurricane
believe me oh my sweet sugar cane

Give me another chance to prove my love
And I will make it true and fresh
Then with the Red Cross
We will celebrate ,

))))))))))))))))more to come(((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((

@ Rotimy

Did you write that??

I thought both poems were pretty good. .

@rotimy


Together you say we can cure this hurricane,
But my heart holds too much of lover's pain

You tell me that you are sorry and to give you another chance,
I'm not sure it you are even worth it, so I can't

You claim to be under the spell of Delilah,
Is she the woman who turned you into a Cassanova?

What about those nights I lay in bed,
No one there to hold me, to kiss my head

I sit and hope that you might one day change,
But I'm sick and tired and im going insane

Do you even remember the night we became one?
How you stroked me and danced until we saw the sun?

You constantly call and say you are working late,
Then my best friend tell me you are with Kate

What did I do that you treat me so,
Just tell me if I'm your lover or your foe

You use to make me feel like a dove flying so near,
I never for a moment did I look down out of fear

You shielded me from life's sorrows,
I gave you my heart to have, but you just borrow

I can't live a life of heart break,
Not only those the flesh hurt, but my soul aches.

Mesmerize:

I thought both poems were pretty good. .

thanks, i never really wrote a poem with this kind of emotion. so i was a lil apprehensive in posting it.

onyinye2:

thanks, i never really wrote a poem with this kind of emotion. so i was a little apprehensive in posting it.

It is the emotion in the poem that motivated my reply. I felt the the pain of the poet in my heart and wanted to offer a contrition,consolation, comfort and continuity.

Esss:

@ Rotimy

Did you write that??

I did. If you read Onyinye's poem very well, you will notice that mine was a line by line reply to hers! The lover boy is back asking for forgiveness and second chance.
Esss, rotimy is a published author with four books to his credit

onyinye2:

@rotimy


Together you say we can cure this hurricane,
But my heart holds too much of lover's pain

You tell me that you are sorry and to give you another chance,
I'm not sure it you are even worth it, so I can't

You claim to be under the spell of Delilah,
Is she the woman who turned you into a Cassanova?
What about those nights I lay in bed,
No one there to hold me, to kiss my head

I sit and hope that you might one day change,
But I'm sick and tired and im going insane

Do you even remember the night we became one?
How you stroked me and danced until we saw the sun?

You constantly call and say you are working late,
Then my best friend tell me you are with Kate

What did I do that you treat me so,
Just tell me if I'm your lover or your foe

You use to make me feel like a dove flying so near,
I never for a moment did I look down out of fear

You shielded me from life's sorrows,
I gave you my heart to have, but you just borrow

I can't live a life of heart break,
Not only those the flesh hurt, but my soul aches.

@ Onyinye2

ON MY KNEES BEGGING
The wound in your heart is still a big sore
And my own sorrow seems now without a cure

Forgiveness and pardon are all all I ask
And a second chance to me will be a task

The spell of Delilah and Kate are broken
Any other pretty thing in skirt I have forsaken

Please Don't go insane my honey
Other ladies are out for my money

Allow me to come back to your life
We can even be husband and wife

Kissing you is like licking wild honey
Loving you makes my life all sunny

Fly very very close to me My dove
And never will I give your love a shove

I am on my knees pleading and begging
Let our love not be like a cloud fading

Love me again my baby girl
Since I have no other girl

I don't want to seduce your mind
Or have have your body
I want you to be mine forever

@rotimy

The wound in my heart holds more than sores,
It contains all the memories of mine and yours

All the times you held me so close to you,
I just wanted to give my soul and body to you

You made me feel so safe and secured,
I allowed you to lay my body down, even though I said I was reserved

You were my first, my last, and my only,
I didn't care what my friends told me

How can I trust you, give you another chance,
Can you make me feel so loved like when you first danced

You stand at my door begging and pleading,
I don't know if I can keep allowing my to continue bleeding

I love you so much with all my heart,
But this hurricane is still tearing us apart

Oh baby, I truly want to be your wife,
But I'm scared that you again will stab my heart with a knife

Tell me how can I trust you like before,
Cause everyday i feel like walking out the door

You say fools and fanatics are certain of themselves,
I guess I'm wise because I doubt your tales

@ ONYINYE2
A KNIFE IN MY HEART

Who will my ever flowing tears dry?
How long will a man for love cry?

Being far from you is like from Earth to Mars
All I want is you and me to refire our romance

Your soul and body I truly cherish
And other girls in my life I have abolish

I cannot forget Our first night
How while making love you held me tight

You wept and said it was your first
And later smiled and said I was the best

Forever a night to remember
One lovely winter night in September!

I can make you feel loved and together we can dance
If you can please forgive and give me a second chance

Never will I the door of your heart leave
Till from you I obtain the words I forgive

Your words are like a sharp knife to my soul
And in pains as if with a fire from a coal

Glad to hear that from your heart you still love me
Your love is sweeter than a honey from a bee

On my sweet baby please Be my wife
And I never welcome any other girl in my life

Because love is for fools Belive my love tale
And you will have a testimony to tell

I will forver like to sing with your name Onyinye
Believing God for you as a gift and giving God ekene

Polaris:

so tweet

thanks, i guess

I'm very impressed, onyinye & rotimy, i feel you , keep em coming please

@rotimy

Oh I remember that sensual September night,
I was so anxious and compelled with fright

You brushed my hair back and said there was nothing to fear,
As long as you love me, I will be near

You took my timid hands to your sacred room,
And soon the mood became hotter than a summer in June

You laid my body down as we kissed and touched,
Soon my hands on your back began to cuff

You stripped me of my clothes and threw them on the floor,
Then kissed me constantly as my body screamed more, more, more!

Together we danced like a wave on the warm soothing sea,
I felt on top of the world and you were there with me

I was a puppet to every move you made,
Soon ecstasy entered and sanity started to fade

Afterwards, you held me close and let out a sexy sigh,
Something came over me I began to cry

You asked me what's wrong and I said it was my first time,
Then with a smile you frenched me and told me what we did was no crime

At that moment I knew you were the one,
That I might one day be your wife and have your son

Oh my gallant how I want to be back in your arms,
And have you as my protector, my knight who shields me from life's harm

Before you re enter back in my life,
Make this one promise and I may become your wife

Promise to love all of me,
My mind, my soul, and my body

Promise to keep me flying and never let me fall,
Promise to be my light when my life is a bleak hall

I want to be your Onyinye, your gift from me,
And you be my first, my last, my Rotimy

na small small marriage dey start. hehe
deep poems.

syren:

I'm very impressed, onyinye & rotimy, i feel you , keep em coming please

will do gurlie

davidylan:

na small small marriage dey start. hehe
deep poems.

did you even like/understand the poems??

@ ONYINYE
BRUISED BUT NOT BROKEN

My endless night is coming to end
The knees no longer have to bend

A new flame is about to light
Shining in our hearts so bright

In my hurting heart I feel a peace
That with you I will end the race

We can repeat our first night in September
And make it last from January to December

Never in my life will I forgot that night
Because what we had was love not a fight

Your kiss was like a fresh dew on a dry land
Your touch gave me tingles from my leg to hand

The jelly fish was not softer than your body
I wanted to have all of your soul,mind and body

When your breasts popped out like fresh apples
I knew why Adam at the garden eat those apples

Making love to you is like eating spagetti
More pleasurable than Ceaser did to Nefertitti

I can't wait to have you as my sweet lovely wife
For without you there is emptiness in my life

I promise that I will love you as long as there is sky
I promise to love you as long as there is God
I promise to love as the only woman in my world
I promise to love you -mind, soul and body
I promise to give you the best love on earth
I promise to keep you from falling
I promise not to hurt you again

Your heart have been bruised but can healed
Your heart is broken but can be amended
Your soul is wounded but can be restored
Your body is now empty but I can fill it again

Come back to me my love
Come back and have for me a son

We will never ever be enemies again like Bush and Osama
But forever a winning and smiling couple like Michelle and Obama

With 'The confessions of a slave', it's part grandeur, part pictorial. I took particular note of the line that goes thus, 'I dream of angels, but live with demons'. This in part captures the theme,that is the good she dreams of and the bad she's had to put up with.

The watered down versions of the original shows the lenght to which creative imagination can be stretched.
Good read oyinye2, and rotimy. Would like to see more of your write ups.

Lovelace:

With 'The confessions of a slave', it's part grandeur, part pictorial. I took particular note of the line that goes thus, 'I dream of angels, but live with demons'. This in part captures the theme,that is the good she dreams of and the bad she's had to put up with.

The watered down versions of the original shows the lenght to which creative imagination can be stretched.
Good read oyinye2, and rotimy. Would like to see more of your write ups.

oh i hope you enjoy these poems. we both put alot of thought before posting. im truly glad that you got the initial meaning of the first poem. shows you are very attentive when you read

oh i did enjoy reading them and yes i got the initial meaning of the first poem. Be on the lookout for more from you.

@rotimy

My love, I forgive you and except,
All the promises you have set

I walked back to your house apprehensive,
My body was overflowing with multiple senses

When our eyes me, we wept with tears,
We shared a moment and forgot our fears

You serenaded me with kisses all over,
Your honey lips sent me to a daze, I wasn't sure if i was sober

You whisked me away to a place of uncertain,
When I came back, I was a different person

You gave me more than intimacy,
You fulfilled my freakiest fantasy

No longer will my heart burn with pain,
But sustain on lover's flame

I love you so much with all my heart,
I know things will never tear us apart

The trials we have gone through are done,
And I can now be your wife and have your son

I promise to be your gift from heaven,
To give you my body 24/7

My heart has been bruised but has healed,
My heart has been broken but now is sealed

My soul has been wounded but has revived,
My body has been empty but filled to live not subside

But I must ask you where we go from here,
Do we start from where we left off, or start a new year?

I promise we will never fight like the war in Al-Qaeda,
But become a power couple like Will and Jada.