DAWN TO DUSK
From dawn
To dusk
They toiled
And sweated;
Their salty sweat
Witnessed their efforts.
It glistered
And streamed lazily
Down their skin.
Each labour
Reflected in
Their hollow eyes;
Each toil
Re-echoed in their
Empty stomachs.

Their salty sweat
Glistered the more
As the sun sprawned
On their dark skin;
It sparkled like
A mirrow in the sun
Mirrowing out their sorrow.
Their shadows
Cast on dusty mounds
They viewed their burden,
Never daring to lay it down
For they must not;
The task ahead beckons,
Duty calls.

Down to dusk
They must toil and sweat
To accomplish
A must do task
With little or no pay.

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you 've got a good picture of words. I kinda like the way you write, we ought have someone like you @ allpoetry website, that's where I write.

As regards poetic devices used in this poem, I think I can notice up to like three so far namely;
1. Personification
2 you exaggerated, thats lovely
3. Simile

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