Yesterday or so, someone posted his lyrics here on NL. I went though it critically and foundout it lacked rhymes and other vital musical ingredients (although the melody I did not hear). So today I decided to post one of my lyrics so that fellow songcan criticize me too. Music is a funny thing you know. It sounds good in the writer's ears but crap in readers lips. But the truth is that good music is good music hooo haaa!

TITLE:
YOU'RE THE ONE

Verse1:
You're the one to stop the pain
You're the one to bring the rain
You're the one to put the smile in ur face
Oh yes you're the one

You're the one to break the chains
You're the one to start the change
You're the one to set the colours in ur way
Oh yes you're ther one

Choros:
I'm here to tell you that you're the one
I'm here to bring to u that power
I'm here to tell you that I'm your fan
And you are my number one

Verse2:
You're the one to end the war
Youer the one to change the world
You're the one that we are all waiting for
Oh yes you are!

You're the one to make the choice
Let the whole world hear your voice
You're the one to tell the story of your life
Oh yes you are!

Bridge:
Pictures lie, in them we smile but deep inside we cry
Memories fly, and come back at night, when we are all at war, you're the one to change the world

Choros and fade (modulated/coas)

Just be sincere.

8/10. Weldone. Wud pos ma lyrics soon