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Re: My Poem by ANDSTEL(m): 12:02pm On Oct 26, 2006 |
men! i luv ur peom for my man Tpac, inshort i will like u to try a song on it (if u sing). Its good. carry on |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 10:00am On Oct 27, 2006 |
Thanks man! Andstel, a lot of my peeps have been trying to get me into singing but I just love writing and doing nothing else. Maybe someday i'll make some tracks but at the moment I have no intentions of singing. I guess u r a fan of PAC. I'm also a BIG FAN of TUPAC. He's just everything about music. Welcome to the zone anyway. I hope to get more posts from you. Peace |
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 2:56am On Oct 29, 2006 |
whiteboy:yay! i luv TUPAC too, wat do u think abt his last album(d one eminem released), n wat song's ur fav? |
Re: My Poem by lauryn(f): 3:31am On Oct 29, 2006 |
na here u baff reach? shuo, dis ur baff na everlasting baptism!!! |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 3:40pm On Oct 29, 2006 |
Scorpio, You love PAC too? Thats cool! Anyway, the album u think is he's last isn't his last album. Which album are you really talking about? RESURRECTION' from 2003 or 'LOYAL TO THE GAME' from 2004. Let me know! I love every track from Pac so I can't really tell u which one in particular I really do like. 2Pac has dropped two more after 'LOYAL TO THE GAME'. They are: 2PAC AND FRIENDS and NOTHING TO LOSE(mixtape)' Go and get them if you really dig Pac. Holla back! Peace out girl |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 5:36pm On Oct 29, 2006 |
Guys! This is not turning out to what I thought it would be. Where is Wale, somegirl and my cutie 'Kutecolor'? someone should please tell me. I need more posts and new poems. Scorpio, help me out! |
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 3:51am On Nov 01, 2006 |
Loyal to d game's one of my fav i love all d songs on d album. where did u get those mixtapes tho? as per Wale, i'll search for him , but iono where d others are |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 9:07am On Nov 01, 2006 |
Alright Girl! Thats cool, I love LOYAL TO THE GAME also. I got the mixtape from mega plaza. Do you really dig PAC? let me know how much and others albums you've heard from PAC. I love anyone who loves PAC! Peace! |
Re: My Poem by kkutecolo(f): 5:28pm On Nov 02, 2006 |
am rigth here guys. but where are d others? scrpio, hw u gonna fix wale? here's d finishing part of the poem 'devils vice. u think its so long? tell me wat u think. ……………………………. doom! The fire flaring up to frighten me more This reminded me of hell Where I was sure I was going For killing my sister and trying to commit suicide What will God do to me, I wondered. Smack me and ground me like my parents would have done? That would only be if He would agree to see me. That reminded me What would my parents be doing? At this moment am being held hostage By some smelly creatures Probably been hungry for three days They would have reported to the cops To be on the look out for my sister and I Missing children would be the headline of the news What irony, I thought I dozed off I saw my sister all dressed in white Beckoning me to come I couldn’t get to her as much as I tried Till the breeze wheezed her off and I was left standing Then she came again This time with a whip looking angry indeed As she moved towards me owning a wicked smirk I shouted as she reached for me Which must have stirred my captors too Because they all stared and groaned at me Then I think they remembered I was suppose to be their meal Because they all sprang up Then one moved towards me Taking the knife I had earlier chosen As the others watched losing patience Then the knife began to descend with the raised hand As I watched, my eyes popping out off their socket Sweating my gland out Agrhhhhhhhhhhhhhh…grh…grh Just then I opened my eyes and heard the tapping of rain Probably the water above As I awaited the blood to gush out of my throat Then I felt a soft spot under me, which made me turn I felt a skin beside me I jumped up thinking it was the monster Oh no! It couldn’t be……… a ghost? Alas! it was the body of my sister Breathing in fact! Then it struck me she was alive. I looked up and saw the familiar ceilings Breathing in the familiar scent. Then it dawned on me. I have been dreaming!!! Oh what a dream! I felt my throat for the feel of blood to reassure myself Not there after all Wow! That was a narrow escape, I thought As I went back to sleep wrapping my sister around me It’s going to be a long night, I thought Only to hear my mum’s voice calling “Arvee, it’s time to wake up”, OH NO, NOT THAT! |
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 12:31am On Nov 03, 2006 |
i love it Kkutecolo, big up's girl |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 9:29am On Nov 03, 2006 |
Hey Kutie, Its cool but just too long. Nice one girl! Holla back! |
Re: My Poem by kkutecolo(f): 3:31pm On Nov 03, 2006 |
i thot that too whiteboy, too long.but it wudnt be comprehended if its shortened so i guess i just leave it that way. thanx scorpio, am glad u love it. thanx all, u are pillars of encouragement.u guys are not hitting in poems, wats up?and where d heck is wale gone to?scorpio i thot u were going to fix that c this When i realize how he has suffered When i realize what he has passed through Even acknowledging what was at stake He still died for my sins Oh! how i have flawed And made myself ungrateful Even nailing him on the cross a second time With my numerous shortcomings He still calls me to repentance And opens wide His arms to cuddle me And accepts me into His fold Whenever i overcome my transgressions its free verse.watdya think? |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 3:22pm On Nov 06, 2006 |
Hey y'all, Just writing to say hi. Bye! |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 8:18pm On Nov 06, 2006 |
Here's just another I dug out from my archive. I hope y'all will like it. It was written specially for my kid brother when he turned 9 in '99. WORDS TO A LAD Be a kid and take the lead lace ur boot and lead ur troop go to school and have a tool hold ur head, dont be a nerd Stay in school and play the rules be a youth and know ur route walk the route and get a job Use ur head, dont be misled Be a man and have a plan take a dive and grab a wife lay ur bed and rest ur head then have some kids and live ur life Peace y'all |
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 6:46am On Nov 08, 2006 |
@Whiteboi, aww @ Thread, i think Wale's a lil ill, i hope he gets better soon still |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 5:14pm On Nov 08, 2006 |
Hey Scorpio, Are u serious? I also hope he gets well soon. How about u? How r u doin'? Let me know whats up with you. Hit me up with another poem girl! |
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 11:41pm On Nov 08, 2006 |
whiteboy:I'm good, thanks for askin how r u doin tho? lol, u're supposed to hit me with a poem, u kno i can't write. but don't make it all lovey dovey tho, a lil mystery, blood n that stuff does it for me thank ya |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 8:45am On Nov 09, 2006 |
Alright girl, I'll drop one for you soon. Maybe in my next post but right now I have to go, I'll drop it later. Bye |
Re: My Poem by kkutecolo(f): 12:36pm On Nov 09, 2006 |
i hope wale gets well soon. besides, somegirl is no were to be found too. |
Re: My Poem by somegirl(f): 12:50pm On Nov 09, 2006 |
Kkutecolo, I'm at Nairaland just not in every thread! How are you doing? |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 5:57pm On Nov 09, 2006 |
Hey y'all, I see you're all still around. How r u doing Kutie? and how about u somegirl? I hope to hear from Wale soon. Peace y'all |
Re: My Poem by kkutecolo(f): 6:33pm On Nov 09, 2006 |
i can now relax. hw u all? am cool whiteboy. scorpio tell wale to get well soon plz, cos we are all missin him. arent we, guys? |
Re: My Poem by somegirl(f): 1:02pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
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Re: My Poem by somegirl(f): 1:48pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Hi Whiteboy, I'm feeling fine now. And you? |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 5:36pm On Nov 13, 2006 |
Hey somegirl, I'm doing good too. Hit me up with a poem. |
Re: My Poem by somegirl(f): 9:48pm On Nov 14, 2006 |
Hi, sorry, but I'm not in the mood to write a poem right now. |
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 6:47am On Nov 15, 2006 |
Well gotta start by saying happy b-day 2 me I was pretty sick and now im back I like all the poemz that u guys are producing |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 8:47am On Nov 15, 2006 |
Happy birthday to you bro., I hope you'll start dropping more poems soon. I wish you all the best! Peace |
Re: My Poem by kkutecolo(f): 12:30pm On Nov 15, 2006 |
happy birthday wale, wen was dat? its gud u are back. hello evry1 |
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 6:00am On Nov 16, 2006 |
Happy Birthday Wale |
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 1:37am On Nov 17, 2006 |
Novemeber 15 was my b-day thank all for the well wishing, |
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 3:09am On Nov 17, 2006 |
Envision this prison I live in Decisions were giving, this mission for living previsions Of bone and flesh, this fragile body, so prone of death A Life, tailor made, stitched and sown of stress Soul tolled at whole, a cold hold that sold Every ounce of strength Death so close that I even count my breaths The elliptical moon shines sot on this literal tomb |
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