From the table of DECEPTION KNOT Series, comes this great flash fiction for etisalat flash fiction prize:

The Day Life Died

"Ooh CREATOR! why is this woman so wicked," EMBRYO yelled. The liquid splashed on his face the fifth time with thunderous spark.
"You're wicked," he cursed, and swam to a corner of the uterus.
The alcohol engulfed womb quaked with torrent.
" What's my mother doing up there- she want's to killed me?"
"She's drinking Gin," Creator replied. "Heh! Don't ask me question again, I'm done with you."
" why?"
"You chose a wrong woman," Creator declared and disappeared.
From his position, Embryo opened his sensory eyes and saw MARY on a chair, with a bottle of beer atop, and a half filled cup.
"Chai! My mother: a drunker?"
Now in shock, Embryo fainted.

Two weeks after, at about 10.am, a rough hand of a gynecologist on Mary's stomach, woke him up. Again, he watched as this doctor ran her fingers across Mary's protruding tummy, occasionally blinding his view.
Now relaxed, he listened to their conversation.
"Avoid alcoholic drinks and don't take any medication without doctor's prescription." He heard the doctor advised Mary.
Embryo sighed, as he realized that this good-for-nothing kind of a mother had already done much damage to his health.

It's three months since he began this journey. Mary his mother, a drunker, smoker and notorious street fighter, had refused to obey pregnancy precaution.
Again, Embryo went into coma.

The third day of the eighth month,
Mary was in severe pain, and was rushed to a maternity.
Inside her womb, the male child panned radially to the left, as he struggled for breath, with an alcohol damaged limb. He saw JOHN, his Father, standing perplexed; and a confused Midwife, with Mary on a bed, struggling for survival.
Go-ossh! He dropped on the flannel bed: a dangerous silence that ensued, announced his death.


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