bigbauer:


Great update.
Hope I'll be forgiven if I say it was too short considering the fact that we don't know how many months we'll have to wait for the next update?

This is how I write. My chapters are always short (500-700 words), except it is a closing chapter, or in rare occasions.

RichBright:
Please get over whatever it is and move ahead.
Some people derive Joy too from your work, you are not Alone!

Thanks once again for this comment. You don't know how much it motivated me.

Chapter 12

3:30 am

They had to bribe the guards at the school gate before they could be allowed in. The Benz was in front, and Patrick drove behind in his Space Wagon. Ahmed turned on his car hazard light as he got to the school bookshop junction, slowed down, and navigated to the car park by the bookshop building; Patrick did the same.

Ahmed put the car in park and turned to face her with a smile on his face. He had apologized for what she had to witness earlier, and she had said it was alright, but they hadn’t spoken since then. “So…I really had fun with you tonight.” He said.
“Me too.” She said but it was clear she still had a lot on her mind. She looked up and then smiled before saying. “Your girl is staring at you.” Ahmed laughed lightly before looking to his right and seeing Bimpe’s blank stare on him. “I put two and two together.” Ruth added
“Technically speaking, she is no longer my girl.”
“Well, from the look of things, she definitely doesn’t think that.”
Ahmed looked to the side briefly, and then focused on Ruth before saying, “I’ll be right back.” He left the car running, stepped out, walked over to the driver’s side of the Sienna and before he said anything, Patrick opened the door, got out, and said, “I think I should give you guys a minute to talk.” Ahmed smiled stood still for a few seconds before hoping into the driver’s seat, and shutting the door.
After a prolonged silence, Ahmed said, “I’m sorry Bimpe, I can’t see you the same way again.” She turned her face the other way and tears rolled down her eyes. She saw Patrick getting into Ahmed’s Benz, and immediately he said something, the girl in the car started to laugh. Even as much as she was in pain, a smile started to form on her face.
“I understand Ahmed. I understand.” She said, wiped the tears from her face and smiled. He was shocked and didn’t know how to react. “Friends?” She said and stretched her hand at him.
“Friends.” He said and gave her a hug.
He pulled away and was about to get out of the Sienna when she pulled him back and said, “Wait. What did you say to Yusuf back at the club?”
He smiled before saying, “Let’s just say I made him an offer he couldn’t refuse.” He got out of the space wagon, leaned in on the window and said, “Take care Bimpe” before walking off. Bimpe looked into space, wondering what her ex boyfriend meant by that statement. She was still lost in thought when Patrick opened the door and got in. “So, how did it go?” He asked and she shook her head. He looked surprised and added, “Don’t worry, I’ll…”
“No.” She cut him off. “It’s okay. It’s okay this way.”
“Hmm!”
“Patrick.” She was saying and stopped to clear her throat. “Thanks for everything you did for me today.” She added.
“It’s okay.” He said, still looking shocked that at how she was handling the situation.
“I want to make it up to you. Let me take you out for drinks tomorrow.”
“What?”
“All expense on me. I’ll rent an Uber and come pick you up.”
“Bimpe, it really was no biggie. You don’t have to do that.”
“I know. But I want to.” When he didn’t say anything back, she added, “Please give me the opportunity to be nice to someone that was genuinely nice to me.”
“Okay.” He said and her face lit up like a Christmas tree.

……….

When the two vehicles got to the bookshop building junction again, Patrick went left, and Patrick drove right. The Benz made another turn to the left, and drove for a few seconds, before stopping in front of The Queens hall. Ahmed turned off the car, sighed and shifted in his seat to face her. “It’s been one hell of a night.” He said.
“It sure has been.”
“Sorry again for what you had to see…I mean the fight.”
“Oh! That was actually pretty cool.” She said and her face lit up. “You just went, chap! Pow! Bam!” Ahmed laughed at how dramatic she was while describing his earlier fight incidence.
When the car got quiet he said, “Ruth, I’d like to see you again tomorrow. Sorry, later today.”
“Umm! Well…you know what I would like?”
“What?”
“Let me have your phone.” She said and he looked at her for a few seconds, wondering what she was up to. He gently pulled out his phone, unlocked it, and handed it over to her. She navigated through the phone for a few seconds, and then handed it back to him. “My number is no longer on your phone.”
“What?”
“I deleted Abike’s number too.”
“Why? Why would you do that?”
“Just hear me out first.” She said and smiled. “Today was great, but it was also complicated. If you still want me after seven days, then come see me here, the old fashioned way.”
“But…”
“Just seven days.” She said, cutting him off. “I’ll be waiting for you at this spot next week Saturday at 8 am.” She added.
What kind of childish game is she playing, he thought to himself. But he really liked her, so he said, “Okay.”
“Cool. I got to go now; I think the porter is by the gate.” She said and opened the car door. He got out and walked over to her side. “Seven days.” She said in a low voice, and gave him a hug. She was about rushing off when he caught her by the arm, and pulled her back towards him. They were chest to chest now. He looked deep into her eyes, slowly leaned in and kissed her passionately.

When he pulled away, she stood there stunned, looking up at him for a few seconds before turning around and slowly walking off to her hostel gate. She turned around just before stepping in, with a smile on her face, she rose up seven fingers. He smiled back at her and nodded.

The End

Thanks kayo80 for this nice story
More knowledge! And all the best in life

Gucciqueen38:
Thanks kayo80 for this nice story
More knowledge! And all the best in life

Thank you.

kayo80:

Thank you.

You are welcome

kayo80:


This is how I write. My chapters are always short (500-700 words), except it is a closing chapter, or in rare occasions.

You're doing magnificently great, however, the point is, your updates takes too long to come.
Thanks for the story, it was awesome. I hope you complete your other stories.

bigbauer:

You're doing magnificently great, however, the point is, your updates takes too long to come.
Thanks for the story, it was awesome. I hope you complete your other stories.

"I hope you complete your other stories."

Please which other STORIES?

Nice story.....tenks soooo much

Wow..Mr Kay.. This was epic..Thanks for this wonderful piece..
Anticipating more..
Weldone Kayo80..
Nice write up..

hi Kayo08 im reading from South Africa i love this story.i know u write short stories however i think this one deselves to be your longer blog..pretty please!!!

chiexcel:
Nice story.....tenks soooo much

Thank you.

EkopSparoAyara:
Wow..Mr Kay.. This was epic..Thanks for this wonderful piece..
Anticipating more..
Weldone Kayo80..
Nice write up..

Thanks.

Very soon...

simphz01:
hi Kayo08 im reading from South Africa i love this story.i know u write short stories however i think this one deselves to be your longer blog..pretty please!!!

Shout out to you simphz01.

About this piece being longer, you do know the title is All in One Night, right? There is so much I can squeeze in a 12 hour time-span. Asides from that, I naturally write Novelettes (in between short stories and novellas). I'm happy you like the story, but the only thing that can make me make it longer is if a publishing house pays me to do so. . Thanks once again for your comment.

ok Kayo08
thats cool i understand. cant wait for ur next one then and I hope someone publishes ur staff soon... obrogado minha amiga!!

simphz01:
ok Kayo08
thats cool i understand. cant wait for ur next one then and I hope someone publishes ur staff soon... obrogado minha amiga!!

Thanks.

I'll start posting the next one this afternoon. Be on the lookout.

Welldone..Nice plot/twist....quite relatable too.
keep it up.

kayo80:

"I hope you complete your other stories."
Please which other STORIES?

Just saw that you've concluded From Nigeria with love. https://www.nairaland.com/3981524/nigeria-love-part-3-romance
I love your stories.

bigbauer:
Just saw that you've concluded
From Nigeria with love.
https://www.nairaland.com/3981524/nigeria-love-part-3-romance

I love your stories.

Thank you.

prestigiouslady:
Welldone..Nice plot/twist....quite relatable too.

keep it up.

Thanks.

hello, nice work well done.but I notice something abt dis story dat make me feel it uncompleted 1 is wat was d offer dat Ahmed gave Yusuf 2 is for d fact dat Ruth and Ahmed kiss dos not guarantee Ahmed not changing his mind after 7days, 3 is wat really change bimpe mode wasn't talk abt or was I d one dat miss dat part, 4 is whom yussuf is to bimpe is not clear, 5 is Ruth notice a guy among yussuf friends but not explain.
these are wat I note but I love your short story

igit270:
hello, nice work well done.but I notice something abt dis story dat make me feel it uncompleted 1 is wat was d offer dat Ahmed gave Yusuf 2 is for d fact dat Ruth and Ahmed kiss dos not guarantee Ahmed not changing his mind after 7days, 3 is wat really change bimpe mode wasn't talk abt or was I d one dat miss dat part, 4 is whom yussuf is to bimpe is not clear, 5 is Ruth notice a guy among yussuf friends but not explain.
these are wat I note but I love your short story

Good day. Let me answer your questions. First of all, it is not everything the writer of a book or movie chooses to spell out for the reader/audience, some times it is more thrilling when you are left guessing and allowed to come up with the interpretations yourself. With that said, the story is complete.

Now, let me deal with each individual question you asked.

"1 is wat was d offer dat Ahmed gave Yusuf."
I Made Him an Offer He couldn't Refuse...this is a reference to a line used well in the Godfather movie. If you have watched the movie series, you will have an idea what it means.


"2 is for d fact dat Ruth and Ahmed kiss dos not guarantee Ahmed not changing his mind after 7days."
Nothing is certain in life, and I try to make my stories as realistic as possible, and not like Disney fairy tale stories that end happily ever after, or with certainty. I feel it was a great way to end the story, so you the reader make up your mind on what you feel would happen.


"3 is wat really change bimpe mode wasn't talk abt or was I d one dat miss dat part."
ONE THING wasn't responsible for her change of heart...it was series of little happenings, and if you cool down and read the story, you will see the little details.

"4 is whom yussuf is to bimpe is not clear."
It is very clear. She stated it right from the beginning when she said she needed him around to chase off other potential toasters. He was like her school boyfriend, while Yusuf was her real boyfriend, but he knew his boundaries.


"5 is Ruth notice a guy among yussuf friends but not explain."
It was explained. Read the lines below from the story...especially the part in capital letter.

' Ruth looked over to where the girl in red was, and she saw her cursing out some guy she recognized from campus. She saw another guy step out of the SUV he had come out of, and she was sure he was the one she thought he was; QUIET LOOKING GUY WHO MOVED AROUND CAMPUS WITH LOUSY FRIENDS.'


Once again...this is a complete story, even though everything is not laid out for you...you have to just think a little to get it.

now I understand ,nice one bro