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Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by Nobody: 8:44pm On May 30, 2007
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Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by iice(f): 3:38pm On Jun 02, 2007
Work on your tenses man!
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by denex: 4:29pm On Jun 02, 2007
My life is not a tale by and idiot. Please do not generalise try to personalise this poem.
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by Nobody: 6:33pm On Jun 02, 2007
sorry iice do u know what they called poetic linesence.anyway i cant blame ufor u are not the one edit my poem .just keep ur ear and eyeson ground when my antology of poems will be out.but in literature we have what we called poetic linesence.if u really want to see my literary work of art visit poetry club web site. all of them are well elucidate.thanks .
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by iice(f): 6:38pm On Jun 02, 2007
Ok oh! grin grin grin goodluck in your linesence undecided and how elucidate your poems are undecided

I think i shall stick to those that have no linesence! cheesy
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by Nobody: 6:50pm On Jun 02, 2007
u see iice dont be angry honestly i appriciate ur comments and they are well noted .am a cool person,and i always stand to be corrected.i will like u to read ur comment on the subsequent one .but i asking u if a short of illumination are potray .thank iice and indeed very grateful.more of those criticism.
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by mukina2: 6:54pm On Jun 02, 2007
iice ca va le tu tu " grin" i ikanise it for you grin tongue
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by iice(f): 6:55pm On Jun 02, 2007
iice is not angry as obviously accompanied by the smiling faces grin cheesy

Ok oh, i shall try to read your other poems, though i do not understand what you mean by


oyezed:

but i asking u if a short of illumination are potray .

undecided
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by SMC(f): 7:03pm On Jun 02, 2007
ROFLMFAO. With this kind of grammer, I wonder who will persevere with the reading. Seems to me that the poster does not even have a clue that he has written lots of crap over several posts. Goodluck to you iice. lipsrsealed lipsrsealed lipsrsealed
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by iice(f): 7:06pm On Jun 02, 2007
exactly why i suggested he worked on his tenses but since i don't know poetic linesence undecided my suggestion didnt make any impact grin cheesy
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by mukina2: 7:10pm On Jun 02, 2007
i did poetry in school but i have never heard of poetic linesense lipsrsealed
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by dominobaby(f): 11:11pm On Jun 02, 2007
Lmao!! ! I just can't grab a thing. @poster, nothing is clear at all. Take iice's words seriously!
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by denex: 12:40pm On Jun 03, 2007
You mean poetic licence includes a right to murder English? All those pepper sellers in Ojuelegba should hurry and apply for this poetic licence O!
This is how your poem is supposed to go:

Life is a tale by an idiot man
full of sound and fun
signifying nothing

an epistle of a lunatic
read by the learned
listened to by serious audiences
ending in laughter

a flying bird
pursued by a frog
for a thousand and one years
till its sudden and arrant death

a football pitch
with numerous players
yet only one ball
and a monkey post.
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by SMC(f): 4:46pm On Jun 03, 2007
denex:

You mean poetic licence includes a right to murder English? All those pepper sellers in Ojuelegba should hurry and apply for this poetic licence O!
This is how your poem is supposed to go:

Life is a tale by an idiot man
full of sound and fun
signifying nothing

an epistle of a lunatic
read by the learned
listened to by serious audiences
ending in laughter

a flying bird
pursued by a frog
for a thousand and one years
till its sudden and arrant death

a football pitch
with numerous players
yet only one ball
and a monkey post.

Much better grammer, but poem is still makes no sense as a whole . Maybe original poster only wanted to make sense line by line basis, hence his use of the so called word "linesense"
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by Nobody: 2:25am On Jun 04, 2007
this isnt poetic license at all. it's plagiarism.

Our bard Oyezed has been (craftily) paraphrasing Shakespeare. sad sad
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by denex: 3:06pm On Jun 04, 2007
Abeg you guys should forgive me to show how the poem would be even with poet licence. I didn't know what was really amiss was linesense. Which I don't have!
I also didn't know it was a copycat job. No wonder there was reasonable imagery combined with terrible grammar permitted by poetic linesense.

I apologise.
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by kingsikaz(m): 3:49pm On Feb 01, 2008
try work on your tenses. let your poem rhyme and let it always be rhythmic, with that u can get there.
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by Trevelyan(m): 12:31pm On Feb 21, 2008
Its awfuly bad sum nairalanderz poet are dribbling over sum poetic licenses they av not bin issued,we all post our works in here 4 cricism n comments, so dont breed d habit of taking offence afterall such opinions cld b personal wit or witout sound judgement!
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by colors(f): 9:10pm On Feb 21, 2008
seriously i hate it when people ask for criticism and then when they get it they cant take it.
if you cant handle the heat why go out under the sun?
all this talk about poetic license is just an excuse for mediocrity. wake up to reality, your writing is CRAPPY!!!!!
you cant even spell!!!!, that you would inflict on poor unsuspecting nairalanders this thing you call writing is grossly unacceptable cry cry cry and that you would even deem it fit to maul the work of one of literature's finest shakespeare my God you should be banned forever from nairaland!!!!!!!!!!!

my advice, go back to kindergarten level, learn how to spell
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Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by 4Him(m): 9:13pm On Feb 21, 2008
Not forgetting that the entire first verse is plagiarised.
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by colors(f): 9:16pm On Feb 21, 2008
4him grin grin grin grin grin grin grin grin
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by 4Him(m): 9:28pm On Feb 21, 2008
colors:

4him grin grin grin grin grin grin grin grin

lol its  a line from Shakespeare by Macbeth - And then is heard no more: it is a tale
                                                                     Told by an idiot, full of sound and fury,
                                                                     Signifying nothing.
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by protocol(m): 2:33pm On May 23, 2008
FIRSTLY, POETIC LICENS IS THE RIGHT OF A POET TO USE WORDS SAY ANY HOW BUT TO MAKE MEANINGS
IF I MAY ASK, WHAT IS THE ESSENCE OF POETRY? IS IT NOT TO MAKE SENCE AND CONVEY MESSAGES.
MAN, YOURS DID NOT.DO U KNOW I HAVE REDA IT FOR SAY 25MINS AND STILL COULD NOT GET ANYTHING.
PLS. WK ON IT, WE AR ALL HERE TO LEARN.
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by Cayon(f): 1:21am On May 24, 2008
Ouch!!!! tough crowd shocked shocked shocked
Re: Poem ;comment And Criticism Is Allow by Nobody: 4:31am On Jun 18, 2008
Funny thread!!! grin grin

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