joseph1832:

Professional landlords feed on their tenants
Causing hardship to visit their tenants
Well meaning caretakers smile at tenants
Just so they can reap off the tenants

cold:

Just one thing though. It's rip off and not reap off. The grammar nazi in me couldn't ignore.

Liveair:
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darkenedrebel:
I rate this 7/10.

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Ray360:
Nice. But too direct. Well, it's your style. I Fancy poems that use connotative language which entails the metaphoric use of words. You may argue that your piece encompassed this device, But it is quite too plain with no imagery. In all, kudos!

Memphis357:
@joseph.......I must say you are really gifted.
pm me,abeg

joseph1832:
7/10? Come on Rebel, surely you could do better... LOL.

joseph1832:
Care to lemme know what's on your mind?

darkenedrebel:


7/10 is A1 ...I deducted points from some minute errors.

Nubian113:


Thank you for the analysis, I'm bookmarking that.

@poem... Your style is amazing but I might have to agree with a critic on one of your last poems. He said that you opt for rhyming rather than sending a message although that's what your trying to do (send a message) I like poems that move me emotionally even if the rhyme is weak as long as the message is clear and poetic. You have huge potential if you just step out of "conventional."

I hope this makes sense if not I try

joseph1832:

Okay. Knock yourself out. LOL.

Can you kindly point me to the particular poem you're talking about?

joseph1832:
All poem doesn't need to include imagery. There's absolutely nothing to imagine when talking about the day to day life in Nigeria, especially when it has to do with people who have no moral scruple.

Thanks for your words.

Nubian113:


My bad it was our friend emaculates poem

https://www.nairaland.com/2843683/love-hatred/1#2843683.60

I feel you're guilty of this in this poem.

# Rhymes over reasons


In my humble opinion hun.

blublahd:
Must a poem come with that structure a, b, c rhymes?

joseph1832:
Not at all.

Nubian113:


Thank you for the analysis, I'm bookmarking that.


@poem... Your style is amazing but I might have to agree with a critic on one of your last poems. He said that you opt for rhyming rather than sending a message although that's what your trying to do (send a message) I like poems that move me emotionally even if the rhyme is weak as long as the message is clear and poetic. You have huge potential if you just step out of "conventional."

I hope this makes sense if not I try

donifez:
I like it, the pattern is cool. One love.